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Thursday, April 12, 2012

Better Verbs= Better Prose

Have you ever asked yourself, "why does my work sound so bad?" More than likely it's a couple of  problems. But as I was searching the net for someone to tell me why my books sounded so sucky, I found a huge hint. VERBS! My verbs were dulling my work. Specifically, the TO BE verb and mediocre verbs, MOVE, WALK, OPEN, SMILE, RAN.
Instead of using an adverb to describe a plain verb, use a stronger to improve your prose.
He quickly ran inside = He dashed inside
A smile was on her face = A smile stretched across her face.
The room was full of shoes = Shoes cluttered the room.
Sometimes sentences may need to be rearranged for a better vision.
All right! Now, back to editing!


  1. Hey this is interesting. And so true! The way you write can definitely help (or not) a story. Some people can write about bread and somehow make it interesting. (Not that bread isn't interesting ;))
    But your examples really underline that.

    1. *GASP* The first person ever to comment on my blog!
      Sorry Honey, I'm gonna stalk you now.

  2. I am not commenting, just telling you that there are Muslim writers out there (saw your question somewhere else).

    You can find me here

    1. Thanks for taking the time to answer my question!